ABOUT ONCE-OTHER THE NOVEL THAT’S MORE THAN A NOVEL. FAR MORE!
WHEN I WAS DONE WITH MY FIRST DRAFT I HAD A KIRKUS REVIEW DONE ON ONCE-OTHER. MY REASON FOR THIS WAS TO GET UNBIASED FEEDBACK OF ONCE-OTHER.
THIS I GOT AND IT WAS WORTH EVERY PENNY I PAID KIRKUS FOR IT. YES. IT ALLOWED ME TO THEN FIX EVERYTHING THAT WAS NEGATIVE AND ENSURE WHAT WAS GOOD BECAME BETTER. BELOW IN THE KIRKUS REVIEW I’VE PLACED IN BOLD TYPE THE PARTS OF THE REVIEW THAT I FIXED BEFORE SELF-PUBLISHING ONCE-OTHER.
YOU SHOULD ALSO READ THE REVIEWS OF REAL READERS WHICH CAME AFTER KIRKUS REVIEW HERE ON THIS WEBSITE.
HERE IS THE KIRKUS REVIEW.
A debut sci-fi epic explores a colonial world striving for independence from its master planet. This long and sometimes surreal tale is set on a planet informally referred to by its inhabitants as “Here-Born”, thereby differentiating it from their species home world of Earth, which they call “Earth-Born” or EB.
The inhabitants of Here-Born were originally colonists sent from distant Earth; they crash-landed on Here-Born and began the slow, torturous process of adapting to a world with a higher gravity than Earth and no water, a blasted desert realm whose “face is scarred by one-third a sea of rock and awash in two-thirds an ocean of sand-and nothing else.”
Despite these forbidding conditions, the Here-Born colonists flourished, adapting to the gravity and developing localized telepathy, a resistance to the planet’s extremes of heat and cold, and a prosperous trade in secondhand body-part replacements, a cultural innovation that never fails to revolt tourists from Earth-Born.
“One trader in such body parts is the title character, who’s also involved in a Here-Born campaign to throw off the imperial shackles of Earth-Born; as Once-Other rails at one tourist, Here-Born natives hate old Earth’s “underhandedness, your Earth-Born politics, your oppressive taxes, your laws, and your damn ignorant educational system.”
And the last item-education-is unexpectedly important; “Never before,” Once-Other muses, “had any of us imagined how dangerous a weapon against young minds an education system could become.”
This broader setting-freedom fighters trying to resist and subvert their political overlords-gives Nysschens ample opportunity to expound on all manner of political topics, with Once-Other at one point musing, “Can anyone believe that over on EB you pay higher taxes the more productive you are? That is how they reward success-by penalizing it?”
The narrative often feels overlong and the characters, underdeveloped; the actual science in this sci-fi novel won’t have anybody confusing it with Dune. (These I fixed–Lawrence.)
But the sociological observations that are obviously Nysschens’ main concern are indeed consistently intriguing. A revolt on a distant planet holds a mirror up to Earth in this erratically effective novel (Also redid and repaired this one–Lawrence).” –KIRKUS REVIEWS
“A story that will draw you in! January 26, 2016 — As others have said, this is a blend of science fiction, adventure, politics & morality. While it took me a while to catch on to the authors style, the concepts on the structure of a truly free society are pearls worth the work to obtain. Lawrence Nysschens brings you to a world of unimaginable hardship, yet the inhabitants thrive, all the while living with a system of governance that actually works to advance a individuals personal goals. I really enjoyed it & look forward to his next effort!”
AMAZON “Live by Neatness Alone!” will become my new motto. December 18, 2015 — Once-Other is also the name of the main character, a man of integrity. I liked that the author was able to transport me to that world and interest me in Once-Other’s fate. The character became real and beloved. There are two planets, Here-born and Earth-born with similar humanoids but different cultures. One culture values individuality and freedom while the other does not. The author takes through a couple of adventures and slowly unravels how the two cultures developed. I liked their weapon of mass destruction, so simple, yet effective.”
EXCERPTS FROM ONCE-OTHER:
This defense of ours at times seems tougher than violent conflict. Hope is all we have. Hope that we can bring into being within enough Earth-Born citizens a realization of our Here-Born Rights, our Constitution, our way of life. A life free of government interference. A political structure in which We the People hold all the power and are the true guardians of Freedom.
We sit gazing at her beauty and from my Foundation the reason, why our Founders were right touches me. Their Letter told why and still does so today. With greater understanding, I realize that it is not possible to flee to freedom. Escape represents but a temporary respite, the slave master soon follows and sets about his task of enslaving one-n-all—once again.
We write to elicit your vote. Your Freedom vote for what we have written here.
Do we stand as one? A nation united?
Can we face tomorrow as a free people? Is there a government system designed to protect itself, not for hundreds, nor thousands, nor tens of thousands, but for millions of years-n-more?
Can it be protected from those amongst us bound and determined to wrest freedom away from us and tie real or virtual chains around our necks for all of time?
Please read carefully and understand what we are doing for each other, our children and theirs, and down through the coming ages.
Since winning our Independence from Earth-Born, we have searched this galaxy and many others. We almost gave up hope of finding any government form that would serve freedom and us. How very strange it was to find what we had sought for so long, on Earth-Born itself. In the finding, the reading, and the understanding of this treasured discovery, we are moved to write as follows.
We the People of Here-Born believe that all Citizens who desire a Government Program have the Right to have such a Program brought into existence for their use.
We the People of Here-Born believe that no citizen, who does not wish to participate in a particular Government Program, shall not have such a Program forced upon him nor her. Nor shall the Taxation required to fund such a Program be forced upon him or her.
Now! It’s generally known and fully understood by all that excessive taxation will slow an economy and eventually destroy it. It is, on our part, wishful thinking that those imposing excessive taxation will realize the error of their ways and change when they note how excessive taxation hurts an economy, and thus the people. Because, if we know what excessive taxation does to an economy—so do they!
Yet they impose it.